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age, creative, faith, Life, loss, poems, poetry, Remembrance, Strangers, Sun, time, verse, writing
She sat and watched the suns
Come and go as if they were
Strangers passing on the bitter streets:
A nod, a glance, perhaps a smile.
They rose in the levelled east,
Fought their way to the highs of their days,
Then struggled to climb each obstacle,
The mountains of the west.
She watched from the window
The porch and the gate
As the clock stole the hours,
Spirited them away,
And filed them under ‘lost’.
Emerald vines grew like memories
Creeping slowly over the garden fence,
Tendril-fingers seeping into the grain
Tenderly choking the life unlived.
She watched the marks of the years
Engrave themselves into her hands,
Pathways followed and gone,
And so many dreamed,
Her face the scorched and dried
Map of ages,
Marked, but abandoned before the mark of treasure
Had burned itself into her.
And the suns still came
And the suns still died,
And someone else took her chair.
© All original writing copyright Chris Nelson 2018
Age is not how old you are but how many years of fun you’ve had.
So instead of being lost, time can also be found, right….depending on how we’re looking at things. Half empty or half full.
Great read, Chris.
I like your positive take on this, B, and in many ways you are right – it’s all a matter of perspective. Thanks, I appreciate your feedback.
I’ve often been very negative. I need some optimism.
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What a wonderful poem. The way you are able to pain these images. Just wonderful.
Thank you, your comments on this are very gratefully received. I’m delighted that you liked this.
I love seeing the reblogs of previous poems you wrote.
Incredible imagery! Speaking as one who is well past her 80th and in close proximity to 90, I see myself in your poem. It is unnerving and comforting at the same time. Wonderful.
I’m really pleased that this spoke to you. I must say it is a great compliment to know that you thought this effective. Thank you.
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This is incredible poetry Chris. I love the way you use phrases to create such vivid images. You are a true artist with words.
And you, sir, are too kind in your praise. I am merely pleased that you found something in this that you enjoyed. Thank you.
You are very welcome.
Very beautiful. Wonderful imagery and artfully crafted into an elegant whole.
Thank you very much for your generous comments. I’m delighted that you enjoyed this.
Perhaps it’s the mood i’m in, Chris, but this work tears at me..and perhaps it should.
It’s first-rate writing, no doubt, but it hurts..and perhaps it should.
Always your Friend
john
I’m sorry…and yet not, John. Your reaction is, to me, fabulous as it shows that the point of this has got across. Many thanks to you.
My very best wishes to you.
This is a great piece, I thoroughly enjoyed the piece, it is a very good read. I am going to reblog this one for you.
Thank you, much appreciated.
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